As some of you know, I work part-time at the United Nations Development Program (UNDP).
Lately I’ve been putting on my best face because I’m up for a permanent full time position.
My boss gave me a frank appraisal, saying that she liked my attitude, work ethic and attention to detail.
Areas of improvement included business writing style. She says that I’m a good writer, but I tend to be too lyrical and wordy. Short, succinct sentences…to the point, informative, and streamlined.
She asked me to draft an important memo to some of our senior-level partners, some of them dignitaries from different government ministries.
It was a simple memo, but I put so much energy into proving to her that I’d improved that I missed the trees for the forest.
I wrote the following, which by the way, was CC’d to foreign ministers around the world.
The project has been properly implemented. An audit is performed every 2 years, with the 2008-2009 version expected to be made pubic by mid-late July 2010.
If you didn’t catch it, maybe you need to work on your attention to detail skills.
I certainly do.
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